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More reVISION Haiku

Shin-En Revisioned
Doing fast triplets is hard
Most of us couldn’t

Colorful obi
We debated at great length
Finally, yellow

I wait nervously
When do I come in again?
I think I missed it

Cello, take, gong
Hira, vocals, Thunder God
It’s Kaminari

Senryu stands waiting
Sheilarae and Greg spaced out
All’s well that ends well

1 comment to More reVISION Haiku

  • joy

    “finally, yellow” — weeks of discussion summed up in 5 syllables.

    perhaps that’s what makes some haiku so poignant/powerful/insightful – because there are so few words, each one matters that much more